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    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    28/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 204/326/124
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 700
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1296



    Description:
       idk i just sat down and though for a lil while and came up with this.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsall but overdots
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    your so far away from me,
    the truth gave way to conciquence,
    now we're apart...
    left here all alone...

    (chorus)
    i left a feeling in my heart...
    i wish it could simply disapear,
    how ever strong i may seem,
    i'm still broken on the inside...

    now this world has got me down,
    it's all but over...

    (end)

    you left me first,
    so quit fucking around,

    your presence is enough,
    just to fuck with my head,

    (chorus)
    i left a feeling in my heart...
    i wish it could simply disapear,
    how ever strong i may seem,
    i'm still broken on the inside...

    now this world has got me down,
    it's all but over...

    (end)

    i need a new begining agian,
    i'm sick of feeling this way,

    i still feel you here...
    with me...

    (chorus)
    i left a feeling in my heart...
    i wish it could simply disapear,
    how ever strong i may seem,
    i'm still broken on the inside...

    now this world has got me down,
    it's all but over...

    it's all...
    but over...




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