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    dots Submission Name: armourdots
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    Author: lauren hamill
    ASL Info:    24/f/can't say really.
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 52/30/14
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 918
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 959



    Description:
       about absent fathers and their effect on future relationships


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    And then She said onto herself
    With dreaded memories of regret
    Fully appreciated of their time spent:
    I sleep alone in this bed on
    This white night
    In the blackness of my head.
    Dressed myself in this sorted
    Suit my father wore for
    That one day in my youth
    When he was my hero.
    Wholly realized now, that
    Image shattered in the palms
    Of my hands, in the iris
    Of my eyes when I said
    Onto myself, then,
    The roots of the trees
    Far beneath my feet will
    Sow my empty seeds
    Into the soil, never to be
    Recovered, by the coiled
    Hands digging deep
    Into my flesh.
    Today, her body rose
    Untouched. Blanketed in
    Decaying grass, her insides
    Bloated with moss of years
    In shadow. And She said
    With dread, I regret
    I didnt appreciate
    All of our time spent.




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