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    dots Submission Name: Elitistsdots
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    Author: foxy lee
    ASL Info:    20 f/CT/SA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 27/23/10
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 703
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       Y'all need to lighten up...


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    dotsElitistsdots
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    Doesn't sadness make the world go round
    squeezing,wringing,pulling of the heartstrings
    confusion, hate and loathe
    its why you're reading this poem
    stabbing pain of unequality and jealousy
    fighting, crying, dying
    war of words and fleeting blows
    it has its grip around your bleeding wrist
    and yet you don't let go
    you keep on cutting
    you despise it but you hold on still
    even when it saturates every fibre of your soul
    you won't welcome a sweet release
    you welcome the pain that feeds your sallow mind
    all you see is darkness and grit...
    so what's wrong with this picture
    I ask
    whats wrong with this entity
    that is supposed to be a
    rush of positivity
    in a world that was meant for love
    and integrity
    you strip yourself of worth
    when you pen those words of death
    staining the page with your blood
    and tears, you cry
    expression should not be the end
    it should be the beginning




    Submitted on 2006-12-05 11:40:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it. It made me sad, but mostly because it rings true. I try to focus more on the happy or at least ok parts of life. But my downer stuff always seems better, and much more appreciated. But I dont think we're hopeless. I think people in general are in need of a good smile, someone to light them up, and remind them why life is a gift and not a curse. Its we who make ourselves so sad, and we can be the ones to make it better. :) good write.
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, this is kind of true for a majority here. It's sad to say that but this is just how it is. It should be that the saddness brings inspiration to the poets but this inspiration should maybe lead to happiness in words to counteract your real life because art is not supposed to be all about reality. Art is an ethereal thing that needs the nourishment of your imagination not just the things you might rewrite from your diary that starts every day with the line: I cut myself again. Where is the beauty in that? Even saddness can be beautiful but not in that raw straight to the point way. I just think that it's ok to sometimes give in to yourself and be free for even just a moment from your everyday worries, pains etc. because poetry is here to give you this release and it's on you to find it. May this be hard to believe but your poetry does not and should not simply just revolve around you. If you make it all about you then you are keeping it a prisoner. Words are to travel, build, shape in thousands of ways possible and you can't give them that if you keep them all locked up inside your everyday angst. Thank you for this poem foxy lee :)
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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