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    dots Submission Name: In my findings of Jim and Idots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 696
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       self explanitory...I'm sad.

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    dotsIn my findings of Jim and Idots

    I have found, through my findings
    that I want to make him happy
    I remembered shaking his face
    while he slept
    I remember a stubborness that would refuse me a smile
    and whilst I remember, I see
    his smile
    and blue eyes
    and adoration for me
    and in them I felt beautiful
    and lovely
    and I was happy
    that maybe he thought I was something pleasant
    just being able to give him that

    I hate poems like I and she and he and all the simple pointless, certainly not poetic feelings
    and this is what this is
    a pointless text
    written from pointless feelings
    bothersome none the less
    and weighing heavy on me
    that he may not love me
    and I, like so many things to him, have become a dissapointment.
    Why can't I at the very least
    be a pleasant memory

    Submitted on 2006-12-05 12:04:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't like people who's name starts with a J, ends in M, and has an I in the middle.

    That's all I have to say.
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I feel about this the way you do about all the Tony stuff...and that's all I have to say, really.

    Except stop trying to make him happy, and make yourself happy.

    And don't ditch me when your boyfriend shows up, ho!
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      My name is Jim and I have blue eyes! And this sounds like something maybe my wife would say to me or about me. I'm gonna go kiss her and tell her that I love her.


    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by bigrig0625 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is nice dear....did this come from the talking to jim yesterday? and the aforemenioned desperation/need of the candy?
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      i hate just saying "i like this". but, i do. i can't really think of any worthwhile input that could make it better. i like how it changed from your longing to your frustration towards your longing and writing. i feel the very same way, sometimes when i write. but, it's therapeutic to me. and, i have come to find it's not pointless to a LOT of people.

    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by lauren hamill | [ Reply to This ]

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