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    dots Submission Name: yin and yangdots
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    Author: TheBlackFairy
    ASL Info:    18/female/Caldwell
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 32/29/15
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Crimson Clouds darkent the sky with long forgotten tears to fall upon the shatteredsouls of the millions hidden in the obscure rainbow of night.
    As the ivory moon tries deperately to shine its rays of peace upon the world
    electric blue lighting streaks across the sky in a terrifyingly beautiful dance to warn the heart of the war constantly fought by all. Emerald tress bend to the will of the silver wind as they groan in sadness for those who have fallen silently to the sidelines in hope of seeing an end.
    Yet the enternal yin and yang of war and peace, lova and hate, hope and despair rages on within us all.




    Submitted on 2006-12-05 16:43:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the last part of this piece. Very true statement.
    It is that "yin and yang" that keeps us sane, and keeps our brains from falling lame.
    - ha ha, I sound like Willy Wonka almost.
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by Ratmeat | [ Reply to This ]


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