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    dots Submission Name: The wisest do not seedots
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    Author: TheBlackFairy
    ASL Info:    18/female/Caldwell
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 32/29/15
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe wisest do not seedots
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    Two things we place so far apart
    behind walls of air and dust,
    so thick that the wisest do not see
    that the problem lies with trust.

    That peace hides behind a war
    as does death behind a life,
    That without the pain and tears of love
    most would lose the will to fight.

    The world is just a hidden place
    for yin and yang to dwell.
    without one there can be no other,
    without heaven there is no hell.

    Without the ever present balance
    life would fall apart,
    without the gift of sunlight
    we would never fear the dark.

    Yet as the world continues spinning
    we fight for peace with war,
    and those who wish an end to fighting
    will always lock their door.




    Submitted on 2006-12-05 17:07:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      so very very true,
    this is the kind of poem i wish i could write, for this is just a masterpiece.

    "The world is just a hidden place
    for yin and yang to dwell."

    how many people could understand that truely, not many people are too stuck on themselves.
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]
      i love so much of your work and I already have one of your pieces as my favorites. You did a great job on this one. You put into perspective how without bad no one would notice the good in this world. You have a great talent and I would like to read more of your pieces.
    | Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by Thornful Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      Great one. Sounds excellent. The flow runs good even though the rhyme is a little irregular.

    Second line of the first stanza - you wrote dus instead of dust.
    Third line of the third stanza - you wrote ather instead of other.
    Fourth line of the third stanza - you wrote hevan instead of heaven.
    Third line of the last stanza - you wrote wo instead of who.
    Last line - you wrote thier instead of their

    These things happen to me too all the time. The idea here is brilliant however.
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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