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    dots Submission Name: Prelude to Deathdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPrelude to Deathdots
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    The rain falls like dreams of my own,
    Now, scattered upon the floor.
    And nothing seems what it seems,
    Nothing else matters anymore.
    In the mystic flow of the moon,
    I sense Death coming for me soon.
    Suddenly his cold hand touches my chest,
    And I fight for breath after breath.
    While others around me pray for the best.
    I know on this day I will finally find my rest.




    Submitted on 2004-01-29 15:09:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes! Of the three poems posted in tandem, I like this the best. It has polish, rhythm and enough rhyme to let the emotional message spill easily.Good one, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree. Very vivid. Mystic flow of the moon, love it.
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by Scribner | [ Reply to This ]


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