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    dots Submission Name: Please...dots
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    Author: Imadjinn
    ASL Info:    17/M/Neverwhere
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 340/348/146
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 577
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1101



    Description:
       heh, I dunno, I've been going through a lot of stuff with a lot of people

    I guess this is for all of them...
    and for you too


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsPlease...dots
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    Crack a smile on your solid stone face,
    placate everyone with the common words: OK.
    but your world was stopped by the real world spinning
    another day goes by
    another day and the life of an empty soul.
    well you got to fill it with something,
    gasoline will only get you going,
    temporaroly.


    Don't leave me crying
    don't leave me
    don't leave me
    don't leave
    don't leave
    don't.

    stand in the rain, like you've gone insane,
    and you're sick of it.
    you're making such a beautiful day,
    turn ugly.
    turn Ugly
    so i sit on the street
    and I start to think
    "Has jesus stopped loving me?"
    my situation, see the light
    and lost tunnels
    have an opening!
    you want to find it with me?

    Don't leave me crying,
    don't leave me,
    don't leave me,
    don't leave,
    don't leave,
    don't....





    Submitted on 2006-12-05 22:51:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      im pretty sure you sang this to me one late night, i really like it, almost as much as i like it when you sing to me
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by tennisfuzz | [ Reply to This ]
      these would do good as a song lyric with background music that is mournful and heart wrenching..... i love it!!!

    Peace,
    MaRiE
    | Posted on 2007-01-01 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]


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