zach i like this poem. and i like th reference to the candle nearing the end of it's days. very good. i feel the same way about my ex. message me sometime and we can talk i think we might have a good conversation.
Wow, This is good Zach...I really think that this is a good poem although some of the word chooses could have been better. I hope that things will go better for you next time but remember that somethings you just can't change no matter how much you want them to. THings will always find a way to get better so just stick it though...I love your stuff Toodles Katie
yay! a nonvictim relationship poem! that's my first thought. i'm not one to give advice on poems written about situations i have no clue about so i'll simply say what i can and that's not much because i'm usually on the opposite end of what this poem is talking about. the emotion is well conveyed although the word choice can be a little boring at times. you have an individual style from what i can see so keep up the good work. i figured i'd read something of yours since you were so kind as to comment on one of mine. emily