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    dots Submission Name: Quite Finedots

    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsQuite Finedots

    Scattered thoughts through my mind;
    starts the planets rewind.
    Got my suitcase in hand and i'm feeling quite fine.
    Trotting deserts of sand, curse this dastardy land;
    Tearing through my composure,
    reburning the brand.
    Should i walk down the tracks,
    unmistakable creaks.
    That have splintered my life,
    bringing forthe what i lack.
    Do i fall to my knees, shouting curses and sleeze?
    Will you end all this silence,
    i'm begging you please!
    Now the vultures surround as i rise from the ground.
    Dust the sand off my cloths;
    Hark, the silence besound.
    Still i walk down the line,
    eyes eternally blind.
    Got my suitcase in hand and i'm feeling
    quite fine.

    Submitted on 2006-12-06 13:17:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, you really did memorize it! Second time I've heard/read it and I still love it!!!! I'm stuck in a writer's block right now, so yeah, lol. But I love this one!!!!!

    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      What a unique work! I really like this. I love the way that you end it. So much has happend, but you just shake the dust...that's the way to go when it comes to life. It's funny how you can be so mentally scattered and yet so put together...but that's what we do as people...
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by iKnowWhoIAmNow | [ Reply to This ]

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