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    dots Submission Name: All balck and bluedots
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    Author: mandy dupuis
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 109/138/57
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    She wants to fall to her knees
    all black and blue
    Shadow in the corner
    alone

    She’s learned nothing from her blisters
    the choices she has made
    cut wrist
    abandon children

    She fell down to bleed
    next to him
    waiting for it to go away

    She stayed down
    tried of living’
    she waited along time
    to be free

    I’m glad she fell down
    inside the ground
    the walls of dirt will protect her

    I’ll plant a tree
    while she’s fast asleep
    I ‘ll tell her
    how his hitting
    affected me.....





    Submitted on 2006-12-06 16:16:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a strong write. Sad and disturbing as well. To be "free" cost a drastic price for the girl which is usually worse than the disease. ( as most cures are). But usually not something to be happy about in the eyes of society but instead in many religions to shun or mourn.

    To say the speaker is glad that she freed herself is a bold and drastic move. But freedom comes pricey, and those who cannot endure die. I'm glad she foudn her way out as well.

    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by chilz | [ Reply to This ]



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