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    dots Submission Name: *rhyme*dots
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    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 736
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 742



    Description:
       everything in my mind


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    dots*rhyme*dots
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    *everyday*
    *go your way*
    *breakdown*
    *push everyone away*
    *confront your fears*
    *screaming for someone to hear*
    *fall in defeat*
    *trying to hide your tears*
    *believing their lies*
    *breaking down to cry*
    *trying to escape to live*
    *wishing to just lay down and die*
    *wasting your time on love*
    *blaming the god above*
    *only hurting yourself*
    *telling him you've had enough*
    *battling with your pain*
    *acting a bit insane*
    *falling into his lies*
    *trying to find something to gain*
    *walking slowly away*
    *asking him to stay*
    *being turned down*
    *trying to find something to say*




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