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    dots Submission Name: how am i better?dots
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    Author: Charlie Poppins
    ASL Info:    22, female, England
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 71/85/65
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    Always had a little trouble,
    believing in things that canít be written down,
    Donít trust promises or vows that waver, rather be real on my own.
    Canít see how im any different,
    just one more who fell for you,
    Wonderiní if youíll stick around,
    if you will follow through.
    So darliní explain to me,
    tell me how things are changed,
    Let me know why I matter more,
    how can I ever be sure?


    When she said she loved you,
    did it just not feel right?
    When she took you in her arms,
    and held you like she should,
    Was it just not good enough,
    was it not as good as us?
    What made you wander away,
    hold me close, maybe stray,
    Did you just need a change,
    need to move on quicker?
    Honey tell me, how am I better?





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