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    dots Submission Name: Lifeís Little Secretdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLifeís Little Secretdots
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    I canít vocalize a single note.
    As air escapes from my severed throat.
    I need something strong to medicate.
    For this sleep from which I wonít awake.
    Painless from the lashings I never felt.
    Leaving me tattered with bloodless welts.
    Everything to me simply estranged.
    Life and soul obscene and rearranged.
    Right now I canít feel neither pain or delight.
    There is only darkness no tunnel or white light.
    I led a backwards life and at the end thereís only this.
    "Nothing in the world matters everything is clearly meaningless."




    Submitted on 2004-01-29 15:10:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Coo,nice imagery. Ur painting pictures without touching a brush.
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by dgnofdarkness | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the imagery, but it seems to get lost toward the end.........
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Such woe. You wrote with good imagery, but I feel somehow that it didn't all come together just yet. I don't know why I feel that. Maybe it's just me.
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]


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