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    dots Submission Name: Learning from youdots
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    Author: lauren hamill
    ASL Info:    24/f/can't say really.
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 52/30/14
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 758
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    Description:
       to the women wiser than myself.
    i realize this is a little rough, i wrote it quickly a while ago--fine tuned it a bit today. i'm not satisfied with it, but just wanted to post it for the idea. work in progress.


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    dotsLearning from youdots
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    Who taught me,
    That as a woman,
    I should
    Be ashamed

    Of the freedom you represent?

    Quote
    Unquote
    Feminists
    Lesbians

    And dykes. Why did I not want your words in my mouth?

    I’m sorry
    For being
    A silly
    Young girl.

    Your importance was unfounded in by 34 A cup.

    I thought
    I knew it all
    I could do it
    Alone without the help

    Of you, for I was a very different woman that would not make the same mistakes.

    Innocence is
    Even more
    Blissful
    than ignorance.

    His body against mine makes me forget who I am.

    Now I know
    How easy
    It is to
    Lose to a man.

    To feel empty when I am full of myself.

    Our sins, for that’s
    What they are now.
    Delicate skin,
    Breathing you in, I will not.

    Depriving myself of this shallow “right” just to fall asleep at night, knowing

    I was true
    To myself
    And my life
    Is mine

    The vastness of being you will never reach me, because my heart is out of sight.




    Submitted on 2006-12-06 20:37:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      We as children and we are all children whether in the present or the previous, have an insatiable attitude and right to discover life on our own. The frailties of our nature don't readily afford us the ability to concede that something our parents told us could have been true.

    I have a slight interpretation that you had been told something perhaps significant or insignificant and you discovered the epiphany of that said 'lesson' later and to your own detriment?

    Having said what I have above I think it's important to fall every so often, (not to make a habit of it of course), so as to know how to stand on our own feet! For all the good intentions our parents provide and convey to us through our lives we essentially the center of our own lives.

    It is with some regret that when we realise they were in fact right, we ask ourselves why didnt I just listen and save myself....?

    For me it's a great poetic beginning and with pieces like this we often had the medium in which we can better convey and express what we can't sometimes towards those who mean more to us than we sometimes admit.
    | Posted on 2007-01-08 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]
      umm okay, i like this. but its kind of weird that i do, cause i dont really undersatnd it lol.

    i quite like the lay out and the words those words are powerful. extremely powerful.

    so i say good work but yes it is deffinetly still in progress.
    xoxo crazzybeautiful
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]


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