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Under the lone tree...


Author: Kasper187
ASL Info:    24 m Texas
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Words: 225
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Another sad one about loss


Under the lone tree...



Under the lone tree
© ©2006 Anthony Paul Garcia/
-SorrowsNomdeplume

As I sit under the lone tree
I look down at the paper
And blood is all I see
Thinking if I never see her again will she remember(me)

Like the taste of her sweet kiss
And the hug of her desire
I sit longing for this ,
Pain I miss to fall unto the hot fire...

Like the fall of the rain
These tears fall so deeply
Missing her soft touch which kept me sane
And looking into her blue eyes just freed me

Like the death of a brokenhearted animal
When his soul mate is no longer with him
My heart cries for her to make me full
Once again and no longer so empty

Lost in words I could never say
Here I sit alone in ruin without your love
In the taste of sorrows’ deep bite, I lay
Within the shadows of hate as my rage rises above

Like this bruise on my heart which discolors the pain
I think of love and can’t help but hate
Like sharp cuts on a broken man
Under the tree I sit just wanting it to end...




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  i love it when you mentioned you were under the tree. i picture a weeping willow. idk y, but i do. keep writing like this
| Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
  i love it when you mentioned you were under the tree. i picture a weeping willow. idk y, but i do. keep writing like this
| Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]


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