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    dots Submission Name: Heroes 2.0dots

    Author: Akili
    Elite Ratio:    2.36 - 915/400/60
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I desided to re-do another poem of mine. I think the first one's a little bit better though, I'd like to have what people have to say it though ^_^

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    dotsHeroes 2.0dots

    Heroes have come to save you and me
    From sins great and small
    Greed, bank robbers, envy, and kingpins
    All must take a fall.

    Heroes have come to save us
    With powers and feelings of right
    With skin of steel and legs of fire
    Eyes that always are watching at night
    So we can go and play our games
    They swoop down in order to fight

    Did Batman ever die
    With a last sigh on his lips?
    Blood soaked and angry
    As it had been someone’s wish

    Superman still lies alone
    Eyes searching everyone
    Who can save loneness
    One day, would he fall?
    Would it be at night
    In some dark alleyway
    Would the papers care to ask
    What was the hooker’s name?

    Heroes have come here for us
    Help to learn what’s best
    Live to help, live to save
    Never go against an American way.

    Justice is always right
    That’s what everyone says
    Watch the sky
    For another to deliver it.
    And when our her is bleeding alone
    In a crowd of millions
    Will someone every say
    “you don’t have to die for me
    I’ll handle this one.”?

    Made of steel and little bugs
    One’s life can never be the same
    Why is life never easy
    And what can one do
    When only the villains really know you?

    Heroes have come to save us all
    Help our hopes, kill our sins
    They’ve never cried
    Never made judgment or lied
    Who’s there to tell them
    It’s going to be alright?

    Submitted on 2006-12-07 10:47:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok, i've never read anything by you and this is my first.
    so, to me this is pretty unique and i like it.
    some things throughout the poem lost me and i got bored and some i was really into.
    i do like the story and messege it was saying through the whole thing, and the ending just topped it off and made it perfect.

    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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