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    dots Submission Name: The Marshalldots
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    Author: AtrophyEmpathos
    ASL Info:    19 M California
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 45/55/29
    Words: 296
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Marshalldots
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    Just like my fingernail that is worn
    I had to tear you away
    From my heart-
    By your scorn I have felt
    Just as dead and not half as much wanted.

    There is a place inside
    That few will ever find the path to
    The one you found when you
    Took me up those stairs
    And fell into my skies,
    Held there sweetly as lovers ties
    Were born from your hands and lips and eyes.

    From that moment you were
    Taken by fantasy
    Lost within me,
    But so much was left unseen;

    You left your footprints everywhere
    And I actually prayed that
    The harsh winds of time would
    Never erase a single one.

    I would have carried your ghost endlessly
    Knowing just someday we might have a chance
    At things the way we always hoped them to be;

    Now I only try to forget.

    It is impossible I know, but slowly
    All those places we could go inside,
    The ones that only we knew, that made us feel alive,
    Pour out of me and swirl down the drain like spiders.

    One day I will share this fate
    But for now I am reminded
    That many dreams are running out
    And in this space I find that
    Time reclaims Death's title;

    Sometimes we get stuck in circles
    But the strong still fight the spiral.

    In that war I know that I am not alone
    Not even now, as the rain falls far too cold,
    Leaving only a frozen grave to atone
    For the sad death of symmetry:

    I've lost the Marshall of my heart
    In truth, she was a liar.
    As I lay her down to rest
    I've kept a flame but lost a fire.




    Submitted on 2006-12-07 14:08:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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