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    dots Submission Name: Trustdots

    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 543
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    Stay put
    bonified to the end
    of feeble friends
    snake bites
    and fake fights
    lead us in separate directions
    depend on the end
    because it won't let you down
    dangerous like dynamite
    it's Saten's frown
    plastered on every poster in town
    the circus of still life that lies underground
    snakes and worms
    slither and crawl
    hissing and snitching
    eluding us all
    a friends focus lost on himself
    lovers and brothers
    intwined in doubt
    a touch too much from a father without
    morals damoralizing childrens clout
    another step in the history of man
    too bad it's backwards
    in the mud on God's hands.

    Submitted on 2006-12-07 14:46:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the flow. Feels really hip-hoppy in a way, although I am not sure that was what you were going for. Double Plus Typo's my friend. Sorry, Pet peeve. Content...Good. Another step in the history of man... Looks like Homo Sapiens have stumbled a bit. I am not sure, but it seems like this is a little poke at the clergy. (bout time those little buggers get poked back).
    I enjoy, I enjoy, I drink a bit more!

    | Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]

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