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    dots Submission Name: Tercetdots

    Author: drowning_queen
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 245/270/52
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Three: (adj) being one more than two ; (n) the cardinal number that is the sum of one and one and one

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    I am split through three ways
    a triptych of possibility
    my lovers eyes are all too bright
    two sets of blue-green on my brow
    my mahogany settles on earthly things
    so as not to be swept up in their seas
    their currents both strong as
    my thighs as I ride their joined hands

    I have three plates on my kitchen table
    three napkins folded around forks and spoons
    high piled platters of toast and eggs
    six hands reaching around one another

    We are three heads of one hydra
    the aching swells of three broad waves
    tri-colored sand and three desert winds
    a meticulous sculpture in bas-relief
    with me as the slab of carved granite

    I thought two hands would be enough
    two arms to rock them both to sleep
    two breasts for them to nuzzle at
    two ears for them to speak into

    Their four hands are so much stronger
    than my one will could ever be
    and when I think I am their center
    they clasp hands and steady me

    Submitted on 2006-12-07 15:42:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The first eight lines gave me the impression that it was a man torn between two lovers, but the last 16 gave me the impression it was a single mom with two kids. After reading the end, I see how the beginning fits with the theme, but it's misleading at first. The beginning also seems a lot more esoteric than the rest.
    If it is about a mother with two kids, I have to wonder what the picture has to do with it.
    | Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by freshcookies | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh, DQ

    this is gorgeous and feels like fine art. You have designed your images so well that my imagination takes them at face value.
    It just seems to feel good and permits one to glow rather than become searing hot. I think this is what fine erotica looks like, the passion that created the slow intimate quality is there, with a fondness that is admirable.

    I think it's because there is love at every turn of the line. And a graceful understanding of how all this works. Though you've given us one scene it seems you drift in and out of life herself and its a yonic delight.

    OK, I'm gushing, so I'll just make it a fave and tell you it's enchanting, and even better than that.

    | Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]

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