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    dots Submission Name: Abuse of the Religiondots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Originally i wanted to write something about Religion and Domestic Violence but then i realized that abusing religion is so much wider. Politicians abuse religion to gain power as well as the priests. People who seek spiritual healing are vulnerable and by taking advantage of that is abusive. Tell me what you think.
    Thanks


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    dotsAbuse of the Religiondots
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    Watching the darkness overflowing my mind,
    I seek sanctuary between the walls of a church.
    The scriptures shall help understand my existence
    As I walk through the darkness with confidence.

    I surrender my weakness to the messengers of God
    Believing a voice of spiritual guidance will help me.
    But as I search deeply to obtain fulfillment
    I find myself lost in unknown surroundings.

    Your presence alone claims to be my savior
    As I become secluded from external influence.
    I trust you to be my friend and my protector,
    I enlighten you with my faults and doubts.

    Youíre the master observer of my behavior
    As you begin to play upon my weaknesses
    And I ignore the degree of manipulation,
    Iíve submitted myself to be cared by you.

    This place you call home is a code of conduct,
    You changed the rules and I never noticed.
    My independent thoughts are considered sinful,
    I must to repent to avoid eternal damnation.

    Youíre twisting the scripture to your desire
    Deliberately misreading the Biblical passages
    And now, youíve playing the card of God
    I am punished if I question your authority.

    I want to leave this place of phobia
    Subconsciously knowing it destroys me
    But I cannot renounce without hesitation,
    Your sly sophistication controls my mind.

    Who are you to claim wrong from right!
    Help me say if I am worthy to live or die.
    Who are you to use the name of God!
    I leave with confidence your sins of control.




    Submitted on 2006-12-07 18:43:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my goodness girl, i love this peace,
    i too know of the ways the church interprets what it reads to induce fear insuring our conformity,
    i don't think god is in many churches.


    i love this write its going in my favorites,
    thank you,
    Matt,
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Irina,

    You have done an excellent job of spelling this out in a very straight forward way. In fact, I think it could be read by someone who doesn't ordinarily relate to poetry, and understood as a way that religion should be translated. Yes there are many forces beckoning our support and we have the right investigate and learn as much as we can.

    But it all comes down to how we listen and have a personal relationship with God.

    Your presence alone claims to be my savior
    As I become secluded from external influence.
    I trust you to be my friend and my protector,
    I enlighten you with my faults and doubts.

    These are beautiful lines, and it's sad to me how many people in society simply want someone to follow instead of finding the answers on their own.

    Youíre twisting the scripture to your desire
    Deliberately misreading the Biblical passages
    And now, youíve playing the card of God
    I am punished if I question your authority.

    To me you say it clearly, that fear is the greatest enemy and if fear did not exist, who would want to punish? Faith is the absence of fear and yes, we all lose it sometimes.

    You're a smart young lady, but I knew that. Thanks for sharing your ideas and standing up for a humanistic love.

    Nan

    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      very well put, i liked this writting alote. it is powerful and real, good, good work. i believe in all that bible [censored] but in a different way than all those relegious folk. i believe we and everything is god and we are also our own devils, our fear. we create our own heaven and hells.ect. ect. any way i don't wanna write forever on the subject so...
    goog work.
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      Watching the darkness (overwhelming) my mind,
    I seek sanctuary between the walls of a church.
    The scriptures shall help (me) understand my existence
    As I walk through (the) darkness with confidence.

    I surrender my weakness to the messengers of God
    Believing (their spiritual voice) will help me.
    But (as I search deeply to obtain) fulfillment
    I find myself lost in unknown (surroundings).

    Your presence alone claims to be my savior
    As I become secluded from external influence.
    I trust you to be my friend and my protector,
    I enlighten you with my faults and doubts.

    Youíre the master observer of my behavior
    As you begin to play upon my weaknesses
    And I ignore the degree of manipulation,
    Iíve submitted myself to (as I'm in your care).

    This (place you call) home is a code of conduct,
    You changed the rules and I never noticed.
    My independent (thoughts are) considered sinful,
    I (must) repent to avoid eternal damnation.

    Youíre twisting the scripture to your desire
    Deliberately misreading the Biblical passages
    And now, youíve playing the card of God
    I am (punished) if I question your authority.

    I want to leave this place of phobia
    Subconsciously knowing it (will destroy) me
    But I cannot renounce without hesitation,
    Your (sly) sophistication controls my mind.

    Who are you to claim wrong from right!
    (Determining whether) I am worthy to live or die.
    Who are you to use the name of God!
    I leave with confidence your sins of control.


    It must be something about the season that leads so many to post writes involving religious topics. Of course, this is one of the more serious topics that should be discussed as often as people seek spritual relationship with God to any degree. Unfortunately Irina, what you've described is widely known as cultic behavior and usually takes the form of sensory deprivation, starvation and reprogramming by groups that isolate new converts from loved ones. It isn't necessarily religion that suffers abusein such cases, rather it's the name of God that's slandered by those who use it for personal gain without regard to the damage that may be done to a person seeking Divine Love. I sincerely hope you've never been one of those people.

    In any case, I've made a few suggestions for you to consider in the text of the post.

    Nicely done, young lady.
    Take care.
    Bill.

    | Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow,I really,FULLY agree with you,Dear!I do believe that politicians and priests and people of that matter do use religion to contol others and get what they want;greed.I also believe that this is wrong.It is not right to use the name of God for greedy needs of arragance.You are right!WHO SAYS THAT THEY WERE GIVEN THE RIGHT TO PUNISH THOSE SEEKING ENLIGHTENMENT?!
    Well,that's just what I beleive.Also,I think that you did a terriffic job of conveying these feelings on this subject.Religion is such a touchy subject.Noone ever wants to talk about it and everybody gets offended. <3 and God Bless indeed! - Lindel (I added this to meh favies!)
    | Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by LRRolins | [ Reply to This ]
      Its been a while since i have read some of your stuff. This is great work and I'm glad someone finely had the guts to write it!!! Great write
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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