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    Author: crazy_83
    ASL Info:    28/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 27/29/18
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
    Total Views: 842
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    Bytes: 898



    Description:
       This probably doesnt make alot of sense to everyone else but it was just some repressed angry i needed to express.


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    feeling totally alone
    but still looking over my shoulder
    the moon is rising a wicked orange
    and its seems ive been here before
    my mind is racing
    peircing thoughts of revenge
    angry blood rushing through my veins
    im on the edge of losing my control
    let me out of this neverending story
    who gave you the right to judge me
    who said you can tell ME what to do
    DONT act like you know me
    all you want to do is change me
    like im not good enough for you
    my thoughts are so entangled
    debating on forgetting or never letting it go
    why couldnt you have just let me be
    so much love and hate
    so many lies and wrongs
    your gone but your stuck in my head
    driving me insane
    all your hateful words
    embedded in my mind








    Submitted on 2006-12-07 20:52:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      actually I really understand where your comming from....my mother and i fight like that all the time and shes always telling me that im not good enough.....its gay what kinda mother is that? lol neway you did a really good job writing this and i can feel all the passion just vibrating off the page good job..
    Who was it that you were writing about?
    Peace
    Star
    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by Star | [ Reply to This ]


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