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    dots Submission Name: Disasterís Got a New Namedots
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    Author: Naymless
    ASL Info:    15/F/phx, az
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 142/110/33
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 748
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    Description:
       Yea it's been a while, just a product of boredom...


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    dotsDisasterís Got a New Namedots
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    Every sin is immortal,
    Pure and righteous to the sinner,
    Everlasting in my victimís bleeding heart.

    So honey tell me have you lived forever?
    Long enough to survive my genocide?
    Tell me sugar has it been long enough,
    To forget my evil deeds,

    My sins are deadly,
    Seven in total,
    Deadlier than that wicked smile,
    But itís your curved lips that tell me,
    You love my sins,
    You love my imperfection,

    So who am I?
    I am nameless,
    I am fallen,
    I am weak,
    I am disaster,

    But darliní Iím just an angel,
    Swept up in those ruinous winds,
    Those winds that fuel the fire,
    Sugar, Iím afraid your smileís caught fire,
    But donít worry babe Ďcause my heartís the sameÖ




    Submitted on 2006-12-07 22:08:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      But darliní Iím just an angle,
    Swept up in those ruinous winds,
    Those winds that fuel the fire,
    Sugar, Iím afraid your smileís caught fire,
    But donít worry babe Ďcause my heartís the sameÖ

    Some spelling advice... Angel? I'm guessing that's what you meant and smile's needs no ' same with heart's
    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, quite different from other posts, kewl stuff!
    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by DaRaven | [ Reply to This ]


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