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    dots Submission Name: Autumn Harvestdots
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    Author: uconnfan1972
    ASL Info:    31/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 8/12/5
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 931
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 654



    Description:
       I have mixed feelings about this poem. I feel that I captured the sentiment I was seeking and I am proud to have authored several lines within, yet, I am not sure if I have put all of the pieces together successfully. What do you think?


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    dotsAutumn Harvestdots
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    A new season is beginning
    as the leaves on the trees are thinning,
    a new season of yearning...
    ...burning for love.
    The crisp air and smells of woodsmoke
    evoke feelings as flames
    that consume my being.
    No more fleeing,
    but rather the pursuit of fruit
    as prescribed by all other bountiful harvests.
    Breats as pillows of down,
    warm milky skin and
    black silken hair-
    a sharp smirk snaps
    to her luscious
    wine-dipped lips!
    I devour her slowly
    with a methodic, chaotic frenzy...
    her soft moans bend me
    as red-hot steel.




    Submitted on 2004-05-31 18:47:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i thought it was good, at first when i read the first two lines i thought it was going to sound more like a story but it didn't you made it into a really good poem. good work. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by lonely poet | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... autumn isn't exactly approacking... but somehow I gather that this wasn't about a season. It was filled with passion, and as long as you were aiming for that YOU GOT IT!
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]


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