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    dots Submission Name: More to medots

    Author: mysterious one
    ASL Info:    24/f/in my head
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 58/57/17
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsMore to medots

    There's more to me
    than meets the eye
    I promise you
    that's not a lie

    I have sorrow
    and distrust
    I don't always
    do what's just

    I'm not perfect
    by no means
    I deal with problems
    like most teens

    But I'm different
    can't you see
    I'm not happy
    with that that's me

    Sometimes I think
    of ending it all
    then I wonder
    who would call

    My family and friends
    they would be crushed
    so I just
    decide to hush

    I deal with my pain
    the best that I can
    and wait for the day
    God takes my hand

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      You write very well, and have a developing talent that is going to produce even better material! Being a teen is tough! Mother Nature gives you all the hormones and chemicals that you will need as an adult when you're a Teen, and a time lag for you to gather the experience to manage them well! Sometimes all you can do is "hang on" for awhile!
    | Posted on 2007-06-03 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a well put together piece and i liked it. It seem like every line had an emotion in it. And i think its a time in every teen life were they feel so stressed and they just dont know what to do or who to turn to .I hope your not feeling like that and if you do just try to find someone to talk to before it's to late. this felt original to me it seemed like it came straight from the heart.
    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by Tash | [ Reply to This ]

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