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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots
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    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 802
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 901



    Description:
       its not completed, it isnt titled and im not sure i like it .....bit of a writers block i guess...


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    How can I expect you to understand,
    to be my security,
    to be a friend?
    How can I expect you to love me
    unconditionally?
    Hw can I expect this,
    to believe in these words,
    fall prey to a kiss.
    My insanity holds me back.
    These whispers in my ear,
    they tell me not to believe you,
    they tell me I should fear.
    Hold back they say,
    dont jump in blindly,
    let us show the way?
    The insecurity is planted,
    our love taken for granted
    and I'm to expect you to understand.
    Your not an angel your a man.
    How much farther can you be pushed
    until it snaps and breaks.
    How much more
    can I expect one man to take.
    Insanity is eating me up inside,
    building walls,
    places to hide,
    and your already so far away from me.





    Submitted on 2006-12-08 08:30:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think it,s good, a lot of feelings and emotions are in your work. someone falling in love, i think this person is unstable and she thinks she cannot be loved, so why should this man love her.
    gerry
    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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