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    dots Submission Name: life without medicationdots
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    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotslife without medicationdots
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    I claw at my eyes
    I donít want to see
    I breathe in
    Emptiness washes over me
    I scream
    A torrent of curses
    I need a release
    An end to these wicked verses
    This prison is killing me
    Eating away at who I am
    I bite my tongue
    The blood streams down
    I taste my life
    There is a bitterness
    A salty wetness of insecurities
    Washing down into my soul
    Blood streaming from my mouth and eyes
    Replacing the tears
    With a multitude of fears
    Drowning me in a river of lies




    Submitted on 2006-12-08 10:50:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey hi thanx for the great comment i also like yor picture posted to me it seems everyone has to have their meds i like the word use on yor title
    it reminded me of some of the people i no that love to take their pills

    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2007-05-09 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like the sadness worn by this poem. its not afriaid of what it is and it projects your darker feelings well. i relate alot. medications suck. my dad takes em and hes all f'd up so i refuse. anyways your talent is increadable i just enjoy the ebb and flow of the words.
    | Posted on 2007-05-07 00:00:00 | by jonny b | [ Reply to This ]
      hey... this is really good
    | Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. I mean ur rhyming scheme seems so perfectly set yet doesnt have that added forced feeling. Which is really great because I was kind of getting sick of that from all the poems I have read. But really nice poem, great word choice and imagery. Tells a story through more personal words and shows how death would feel to a troubled person. Great poem, keep it up.

    -Randee
    | Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]
      this was great amanda, i love your choice of words in this piece. especially these lines

    Emptiness washes over me
    A salty wetness of insecurities

    once again great job, write some new stuff i wanna read more

    - kase
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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