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    dots Submission Name: Fatedots
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    Author: Fernando Corto
    Elite Ratio:    1.94 - 23/24/23
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 104
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Life is planned out
    Life is predetermined
    Everyone has a destiny
    Everyone has a fate…

    When we are born
    We are not ashamed
    And though this is true
    We are still to blame

    Disregard, Disruption
    Disbelief, Deception
    The world is corrupted
    Although we’re not hated

    You may be disrupted
    You may be deceased
    You may be stupefied
    You may be cheated

    Fate is your journey
    Destiny is your guidance
    And at the end of it
    All will make sense

    Life is a pathway
    Life is a wait
    Everyone has a destiny
    Everyone has a fate




    Submitted on 2006-12-08 15:31:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thanks. It was supposed to kinda make you go from here...back to there. Its a loophole. Thanks for the comment. I'm not big on vocabulary so I try to get help with words wherever I can. :)
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by Fernando Corto | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, but at the same time I dont. It makes me feel antsy, the short words and repetition makes me wish I had finished it long before I actually had. Theres no direction, which may be the party which bothers me. The whole poem is moving in circles. I love the way it is written though. And I am sure there are may out there which do as well. Just reading it made me curious where it was leading to and at the end i was suprised how wonderfully it struck me as so well done. Nice write though, and I hope to read more in the future.

    -Randee
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]



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