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    dots Submission Name: Dream Life, Dream Housedots
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    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 753
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 544



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    Ello,

    I was in art class, and decided to write FINALLY! If anyone has any ideas on how to make it work better, then go for it.

    Raven


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsDream Life, Dream Housedots
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    I sit in the chair, by the covered window
    I sit and wait
    I look through the cracked wood and down the lane
    I look and wait
    I listen for the screeching tires over the loose gravel
    I listen and wait

    These things will never come to be
    I know that in my heart and soul

    As I walk around our once Dream home
    I start to ponder, as I do every day
    Of things that were and things that are
    What ever did happen to us?
    Where did I go wrong?





    Submitted on 2006-12-08 15:58:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow honey this is beautifully done. The flow is wonderful and it is just amazingly done. I always said you were an amazing poets and I wish I coudl write like you.
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      Work better? This was just right! I like what you get from one photo. You have feeling deep inside you and you have let them out just so we may share whats in your mind. Great write!
    Keep it up!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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