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    dots Submission Name: Sketch of Medots
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    Author: HaldirLives
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 234/149/60
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 967
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 586



    Description:
       Just a few stanzas I wrote really quick. It's rough, but honest. Pick it apart, please.


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    dotsSketch of Medots
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    Do you realize why
    I flatter myself?
    Can you see that
    As I beat you down,
    Iím asking for your help?
    Iíve got no worth,
    Nothing sets me apart,
    Except this caustic wit.

    I pick you apart,
    And kick where it hurts,
    So I can feel power.
    I just need to feel
    Important for a while.

    Be assured,
    When I go home,
    I curl up like you,
    And cry myself to sleep
    Because I never meant
    To hurt you so.

    I only wanted
    To feel better.




    Submitted on 2006-12-09 02:15:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      yea, this poem is very clear. it makes perfect sense and it's like be a bully or be what? what's the alternative?
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by Manee69 | [ Reply to This ]
      haha. you sound like a bully. You know that phrase parents use on tv shows or whatever? 'bullys are cowards on the inside....'
    I completely get what your saying though, I think you elaborate more. Otherwise its quite good, you really get the point across.
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]


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