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    dots Submission Name: Summer Snowdots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSummer Snowdots
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    A slow breath flows
    from her lips like melting ice
    only to pass through her
    steady stair
    held true with eyes
    that you have to take your shoes off
    to enter.
    Skin smooth and white
    like milked from the moons mother
    sculpted by the hands
    of the sun himself.
    as the breeze blows
    summer snow
    melts back into
    my memory




    Submitted on 2006-12-09 05:24:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. I really love this character sketch, especially since it was teeming with metaphor and figurative language. I also love the paradoxes. Well done.

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    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by Aurora-Borealis | [ Reply to This ]


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