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    dots Submission Name: Without youdots
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    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 744
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 630



    Description:
       This is a poem to my best friend/sis whos dumb boyfriend clamies to love her but does NOTHING for her anymore. He won't even go see her and that is all she wants. This is for her.


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    dotsWithout youdots
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    Today she wondered
    And looked out a far
    "Is he thinking of me?"
    As she stared at the stars.

    Love, has it died?
    She does not know
    and all her dreams
    where did they go?

    Confused and all,
    All she needs is you!
    She needs reasurence
    to know your love is true.

    Save her the grief
    tell her you love her, and that you care
    show her how much she means to you
    by going there.

    Save her!
    Like times before,
    for she is a beauty
    worth saving for.





    Submitted on 2006-12-09 05:54:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is nice. I feel bad for your sister though :[

    Guys are [censored]s. Ugh. Best wishes to her.
    | Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, you realy got your feelings out in this. I brings me back to times where i have fel the same way, and it brings them back hard. Which makes it so much better, at least to me, when they can brign the ponit behind any type of writting to the reader so that it hits home. Great work and keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. i was taken back by this. it is beautiful. and this jackass better start acting like a real man instead of toying around. but..hunn you've got true talent.

    x0
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]


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