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    dots Submission Name: Well of Lovedots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWell of Lovedots
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    Fall into the well,
    Drown without fear.
    Cry out my name,
    As the end draws near.
    Lose yourself to the feel,
    Cold water on warm skin.
    Your heart stops beating,
    No blood courses within.
    Cease to breathe,
    Close your wary eyes,
    Sleep eternally in the well,
    As who you think you are, dies.

    Just to be revived,
    With my lips' sweet kiss.
    Awake and find nothing,
    And nothing is missed.
    Empowered by the meaning,
    Captured by what you felt.
    When you did drown...
    In my love, the deepest well.




    Submitted on 2006-12-09 05:55:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A brilliantly concieved poem, with some really excellent rhyme and meter throughout... I liked this poem a whole bunch! bravo... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-06-13 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with the others...this is a beatiful poem! Very descriptive and perfectly written. :)
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by Lynda | [ Reply to This ]
      this is gorgeous. i love it and i actually felt cold reading this because of the wonderful description. great job.
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh...! So beautifully written! You draw the reader down... describing a fall .. and do not give away where they fell till the end. Amazing! I really liked the line, "As who you think you are, dies" It's funny how you can change.. anyhow, GREAT job as always!
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow the stazas where beautiful, and the imagey porjected ito the reader was very powerful. This was a very good and powerful poem, well done. No tot mention the rhyme and flow was perfect.
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]


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