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    dots Submission Name: to be darkdots
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    Author: blueorchids
    ASL Info:    30/F/California
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 1096/928/91
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Angry
    Total Views: 982
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       get to a safe place in life using the worst possible road, and come out of it scathed but not entirely changed.


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    dotsto be darkdots
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    what i want is the indisputable freedom to do my worst and be seen at the height of my filth - and be worshipped for it. not in the way you might think, not in the way that seems to be for the best for everyone involved.

    what i need is the justice of the universe to collaspe on its axis, crack down the center and welcome me with wide open arms in. i want to know that for every shady trade gone undetected there will be a reckoning.

    what i would die to have is the darkness that comes for the light only found within. the peace of mind that births itself out of chaos and clarity's viscious cycle.

    i want to be dark. like the dark side of the moon and the shadow of the tallest gnarled, all knowing tree. i want my shadow to be felt and revered, my blemished soul to be adored even as you despair of me.




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      Well, this was an interesting journey that you have taken me on. I have a way of making things harder than they have to be but I try to steer clear of those "worst possible" roads. My favorite line is the first line of the second stanza. Thanx for the trip
    | Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      Truely...Respectful poetry of anger but an intellegence of a religouse ways of damnating those who have so pestered you...It's got a lot of emotions that seems to bother you...I wonder what got you so ticked off...It must have been something that you couldn't bare the tolarance of the anger build up inside of you...It's so hard to keep our cool...I like how you wrote out your emotions though...It helps me alot mabey it does to you...Also, I liked how you talked about something similar to ending the world, and you being saved by someone who may understand you...It's hard to read this poem and understand it...But I'm trying my best to do so...Once again, it seems that you are so intellegent and truely know how to write your emotions at the heat of the moment...I hope your feeling a bit not so angered...I love how you wrote about the darkness...This poem was intresting new to me, and I like it...Unique and a personal sense of style...
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      You know what? I hope that I never piss you off.
    I like the words. Anger and Angst poetry are really my cup of tea.
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by Semper Fidelis | [ Reply to This ]
      i think that this is really good. i have to agree with JR Hoodlum. i think that you used the right amount of bold ness at all the right times. keep up the great work lili
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      *shivers*

    wow, i want what you want.

    society to be tilted on its axis, indeed!

    you make being violently angry sound like a good idea. hell, some of the best ideas in the world were thought up by pissed off men going to war... of course, some of those things were things like weapons, but then...

    ah well, i do like it because it takes an emotion and turns it around into some positive (err...rephrase...productive) thinking.
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by EmeraldJealousy | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the part about peace coming out of chaos... thats a very cool lil paragraph and the last line 'my blemished soul to be adored even as you despair of me.'... wow... i like this a lot though i kinda get a "i want you to notice when im not around" thing as i read all this too... dunno why... but yeah... powerful write!
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked how you didn't make it too faint and at the same time make it too bold that this is anger coming from the lines of this poem. Nice choice of words, they make me wonder more about you. Good Job.
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by JR Hoodlum | [ Reply to This ]


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