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    dots Submission Name: Breaking Through to The Other Sidedots
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    Author: Florescent
    ASL Info:    24 - Female - Amman
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 5/5/6
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       This is a poem to the soul of the Lizard King (Jim Morrison) have always and will always love you...


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    dotsBreaking Through to The Other Sidedots
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    Searching on what lies beneath
    A graveyard and the weeping trees
    A million faces and a “good bye” song
    Some fans exchanging soar silent sobs.

    “Who lies there under the soil
    Surfacing like water over oil?”
    “There lies Jim” a voice then screams
    “The lizard man who still there breaths”

    “Yes, he does, I know that’s true”
    For him let’s sing:
    “we’re breakin’ through”.




    Submitted on 2006-12-09 15:08:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Long live the lizard king and whiskey!
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
      nice lil tribute to the great Jim~pretty decent~
    just one question about a part of it
    "Some fans exchanging soar silent sobs"
    is soar supposed to be sour or were you going for something else? just curious
    not bad though~keep up the good work!! :)
    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]


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