Why don't you like it? I think it's beautiful. I like the last part - Happy, even in death. Coming from a country with tropical climate, I've not experienced autumn before. But what you write is just how I imagine it is. :)
sometimes i like to find a persons favorite poem, and try to imagine what kind of poerson they are...but oddly enough, .....b any how, i really think you interpreted an autumn day quite well in your peom....kudos
wow!!! this is really a lovely piece of art you have here. its simple yet its dynamic. this is written exquisitely, my friend. great job. it really brings the beauty of autumn to the soul of the reader. given its brevity it is nothing short of remarkable. wonderful! superb! you have some fine images here as well. my favorite line is the last, " happy even in death". thats really deep, girl. i commend you on this stupendous write. i am going to add this to my favorites list.
God bless you. john-paul
p.s. read and comment on my latest piece '"She Dances Among Butterflies". when you get the time. i think that you will really like it.