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Words and Love


Author: Angel_Sin
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Words and Love



A 5-second window in his eyes,
love shone through,
glorious and true.
Fated words formed shapes on
his sweet mouth,
my hand stopped them from
coming out.

Some words speak of love and eternity,
but that which infuses words
with meaning and sincerity is
capricious and inconstant.

Not a single word,
love's most loose anchor.
Should love move you
each day close,
my soul would radiate
through heaven and hell.




Submitted on 2006-12-09 22:11:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very sweet and well-written poem... This is the type I like to read about love poems.. I like all your poem but this lines most:

" A 5-second window in his eyes,
love shone through,
glorious and true.
Fated words formed shapes on
his sweet mouth,
my hand stopped them from
coming out. "

That is a great moment that you described.. Well done.


| Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]


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