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    dots Submission Name: Ballroom Dancedots
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    Author: Ygi
    ASL Info:    17/m
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 290/149/165
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 557
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 836



    Description:
       This is a complilation piece of other pieces I didn't really like.


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    dotsBallroom Dancedots
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    You could do anything
    and I would follow you
    with a shake of the head
    I have fallen too

    And if it happens again
    (Will you take painted windows,)
    will I make it through?
    (if the house looks nice?)
    I think I'll leave the light on
    (Or will you shatter the glass,)
    as I dream it true
    (and share this ballroom dance
    through the rain and ice)



    You come now
    (In you I see)
    as I once knew
    (A field of summer lights)
    masked you are
    (lovers dancing through the nights)
    yet painfully true-
    (romantics taking flight)


    Now here he comes,
    I have to go



    Did I tell you I love you?
    Oh, you already know




    Submitted on 2006-12-10 10:53:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow babee. this is passionate. i love it. this could be a song. very nice.

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    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]


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