A fine poem, reminiscent of the World War I poetry (ever seen the number of poets who died in that war??) excellent (in the final line you have written "an" when I believe that you mean "and") bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
I really like this and it's so powerful.
I escpecialy liked the line "Calling to the soul,
beckoning is the voice from the forgotten soldiers."
I love how it says to remember all the soldiers, not just the ones we read about.
It's really good =]
Excellent melancholic piece. I like the motifs a lot as I often use them and I just thought this was very well written. The descriptive style is excellent and the atmosphere is just the kind a piece such as this one could ask for.
Hey~I dont know why you dont like it~I do~love the imagery, all I can see in my mind is a cold, smoky Gettysburg, with soldiers laying dead all about (thats where the forgotten soldiers comes into play for me) and look, the spelling [censored] has nothing to say~hehe~but overall I really like this piece~Ghostly!! love ya hun :)
I liked it,, really sat me in a place of holy war, well thats what I got of it, I loved the beginning lines,
"Hear the words, echos from times past. Long ago cries from valleys of the dead."
very well described, I liked how you manipulated with the reader, in the words, like you forced the reader to listen to your words instead of reading it, it got the powm the perfect atmosphere,
"Remember me.... for I see you. Decompose with us."
I lived how you played with dead words, like ypu described yourself dead for the making the reader wanting more, saying "For I see you." very challenging and very fragile.
I liked the next line too, how u use the reader to come alive in the poem, saying decompose with us, like the reader was dead aswell.
"Fight with us on the battlefield, an join our long dead chorus"
I loved the ending lines, even though they ended a little sudden, making me feeling alittle "was that it" I think u could make alot more of this if you tried, cause it got potential, very much, I might add. Loved the wordplay, and imagery,