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    dots Submission Name: Missing youdots

    Author: elseibi
    ASL Info:    20/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 228/180/38
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Its the anniversary of my grand-ma's death today, this ones for her, and for everything she did for me.

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    dotsMissing youdots

    These last six years,
    they went so fast,
    your memory forever,
    it will last,

    I feel you near,
    this very day,
    as i look at your photo in my hand,

    I hear your laugh,
    I see your smile,
    even though you've left this land,

    Someday i'll see you,
    be with you once more,
    forever at peace,
    through clouds we'll soar.

    I love you,
    i miss you,
    and someday,
    i'll see you again.
    Thank-you for all you did for me.

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      It's a privilege to listen-in to this conversation with angels; it has been several decades since I might have been able to express myself so directly about anything at all, or even know clearly what I felt about it. You're making me think about that!
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      what a gorgeous write, as Ron has said, i'm sure she's so very proud of you. i know how painful it is to write poems like this, (i write verses for family funerals)
    it's so heartfelt. it's obvious you loved her very much.
    great poem, well done!!
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Lou, this is wonderful! I can just feel your Grandmother looking down on you, glowing with pride and love!!
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      It's less poetic than your usual, but I can tell it's heartfelt. I've only rarely lost someone in my life, but I can understand how difficult an experience it is--even only coming close leaves an imprint.

    Sympathy is lost on those that cannot feel; still, it is the greatest gift in the hands of those that can.

    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]

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