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Missing you


Author: elseibi
ASL Info:    20/f/uk
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Its the anniversary of my grand-ma's death today, this ones for her, and for everything she did for me.


Missing you



These last six years,
they went so fast,
your memory forever,
it will last,

I feel you near,
this very day,
as i look at your photo in my hand,

I hear your laugh,
I see your smile,
even though you've left this land,

Someday i'll see you,
be with you once more,
forever at peace,
through clouds we'll soar.

I love you,
i miss you,
and someday,
i'll see you again.
Thank-you for all you did for me.




Submitted on 2006-12-10 17:03:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It's a privilege to listen-in to this conversation with angels; it has been several decades since I might have been able to express myself so directly about anything at all, or even know clearly what I felt about it. You're making me think about that!
| Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
  what a gorgeous write, as Ron has said, i'm sure she's so very proud of you. i know how painful it is to write poems like this, (i write verses for family funerals)
it's so heartfelt. it's obvious you loved her very much.
great poem, well done!!
michelle
| Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  Lou, this is wonderful! I can just feel your Grandmother looking down on you, glowing with pride and love!!
| Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  It's less poetic than your usual, but I can tell it's heartfelt. I've only rarely lost someone in my life, but I can understand how difficult an experience it is--even only coming close leaves an imprint.

Sympathy is lost on those that cannot feel; still, it is the greatest gift in the hands of those that can.

--crimson
| Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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