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    dots Submission Name: May I Be?dots

    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       For him.

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    dotsMay I Be?dots

    May I be
    the shirt that clings to your chest?
    so I can touch you always.

    May I be
    the rhythm of a song?
    so I can make you dance.

    May I be
    your voice when you are scared?
    so I can be your strength.

    May I be
    the guitar you shyly strum?
    so I can be your passion.

    May I be
    your favorite movie?
    so you can memorize every part of me.

    May I be
    the greatest song you've ever written?
    so you can be oh-so-proud of me.

    May I be yours?

    Submitted on 2006-12-10 19:51:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmm.. well I do like the structure. Simply cute and real sweet.. and yeah, the comment below me is right (passion's kinda strong). Apart from that, it was nicely penned... bravo! :D
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by Czarina Words | [ Reply to This ]
      Oooooh!!!! Who's? No fair; your clues are hardly guessable. It's interesting how you always stick to a certain theme. They all seem to match, except for the line with the shyly strumming guitar which must be the passion. I think of passion as being a bit louder (like electric guitar solo loud) but then it can be the exact opposite.

    Cool beans.
    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      very cute...i believe there was an "aww" moment their...another short but sweet...

    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by Romeo | [ Reply to This ]

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