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    dots Submission Name: Together in Deathdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsTogether in Deathdots
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    His cold body
    Lies next to mine
    He is dead
    and I am very much alive
    He is beautiful
    Laying stiff
    His face in a blank stare
    As if he is seeing
    Something not there
    My heart beats slow
    His final moments
    Only I know
    I realize my fate
    as my breath quickens
    Opening up death's gate
    I grab his cold hand
    Ready to join him in death
    My heart stops as I smile
    Seems I have no time left....





    Submitted on 2006-12-10 19:51:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is scary-beautiful so Romeo and Juliette-esque I love it. My crazy little mind is thinking "hmmm how did they do themselves in?"

    Crazily Yours,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. It is morbid!
    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]


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