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    dots Submission Name: Blood Bathdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 404
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    Description:
       I was in a morbid mood when I wrote this. Not one of my best though...


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    dotsBlood Bathdots
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    Crimson surrounds her
    Rotted flesh floats on this blood sea
    She lies in her ocean of pain
    Her hair as silver as a knife
    Her skin the color of death
    Body parts press against her
    Her eyes open wide
    Revealing the blackness of her soul
    She bathes in her victim's blood
    Washing away her age
    She smiles
    Her skin soft and new
    Her hair returned to raven black
    With every crimson drop
    Her age disappears from her face
    She kills and slaughters
    For her own selfish need
    She smiles
    As her victim's scream and plead
    Her torture doesn't cease
    She has been doing so
    For thousands of years
    Who is to stop her now??







    Submitted on 2006-12-10 20:01:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Vampiric yet lovely. I would love to know where you found the muse for this piece.

    To Mrs Bloom,
    from Mr. Bloom,
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. Morbid again.
    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]


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