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    dots Submission Name: in limbodots
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    Author: lauren hamill
    ASL Info:    24/f/can't say really.
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 52/30/14
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsin limbodots
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    Oh my dear,
    Why cant we stay
    Right here
    Just here.

    Listen to your heart beat
    Feel your fingers
    entwined in mine.
    For we could be

    Such great things
    Together. But,
    Honesty was never
    Are strong suit.

    Sarcastic banter.
    We believe much
    Of the same things.
    Yet truths are sealed.

    Words that cannot
    Escape my lips
    For fear this
    Will all be over.

    Id rather not know
    Id rather stay in limbo
    For we are two
    Very different people.

    And once passion
    Runs away from me
    Escalated to a place
    I cannot be.

    What will happen?
    Will you understand?
    Or will this be the
    Epitome of you and me?






    Submitted on 2006-12-10 21:31:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "Such great things
    Together. But,
    Honesty was never
    *Are* strong suit.


    This passsage is marvelous and really epitomises the thoughts of - "I'm not sure what to say or how to say it!"....

    Words that cannot
    Escape my lips
    For fear this
    Will all be over.


    A wonderful poetic expression!
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]


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