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    dots Submission Name: Worst Line of Poetry Everdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 666
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    Bytes: 96



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       This is a line that sounded good to me when I woke up in the middle of the night and wrote it. This is unfinished. That's why I put it in Random Thoughts. I was trying to prove that I can write dreadful stuff.


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    dotsWorst Line of Poetry Everdots
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    The seagulls lend their beauty to the visual and odorous stench of the landfill.





    Submitted on 2004-05-31 23:25:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that is a a pretty bad line i must say, kinda funny too, made me laugh and so okayyyyyy in a confused kinda way lol, hey that rhymed lol, but anywho thanks for the laugh!
    | Posted on 2004-06-04 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Rofl...

    I can see what you mean here...
    I do this too.. hold on, lemme get my notebook and I'll find one of my terrible lines, here we are...

    "I'm stuck in a rut, my rhyme scheme sounds like something barked by a mutt..."

    *rolls eyes* Yeah, I do it too LOL! And I can just see.. you could sleep easy maybe, thinking of this GREAT line, filled with potential, perhaps, perhaps, this is the Daffodils! and then you wake up the next morning and look at the paper, and there's a groan...

    "Was I really going to write a poem about a rubbish dump?!" But thinking of seagulls and landfills is what makes you a writer... I thought that line was hilarious tho.. keep it up, Ames!
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      It cought my attention... but it didn't touch me in any way, shape, or form... perhaps if it has more to it I would have liked it more.
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      For some reason this caught my attention. I love it!

    It has some kind of...I don't know what, that just seems right. Definitly contrary to the Title.

    Beautiful Irony.
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by BahamutZer0 | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha I had to read it twice before I actually got it!! LoL This is funny! Another good idea from cuddledumplin! (Your alias is so cute!) Good line...lol
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sure Rudyard Kipling was right when he said that "words are of course the most powerful drug known to mankind". I also wake up with a wild idea flying around that I just have to put on paper, or even worse, sitting in the bath and before I can get to a piece of paper I have to face ten stories, relate a few of my own and dry my hands. By that time the magic is diluted and the bathwater cold. Aaagh, frustration. YOu got this one down alright though, develop into three lines and it may not be the best ever, but I reckon it will be noteworthy.
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      I can certainly relateto waking up with lines in your head. Normally I end up fashioning mine into longer pieces because I want to see how they end...kudos to you for being able to resist.

    ~ Niphredil
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]
      ummmm.....i remember spending some time at the landfill....i was the only one there at the time emptying a largish trailer and the whole place was swarmed with what could have been million of seagulls...my one thought was 'lord, if these mindless avians had any brains at all they could get together and attack me and i would be dead in less than 30 seconds....' beauty? i think not....(i've got a whole notebook full of stuff i wake up with) Have a great day!!
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]
      it has something. I can envision it at the beginning of some descriptive part of a novel or a poem. it paints a good picture. do something with it. I know that feeling of waking up with a line in my head. it keeps swirling in my mind until I write it down. mostly they end up in some poem. sometimes the writing down is the end.
    anyway I liked it. do something with it and it isn't the worst line of poetry ever.
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      God, I hate when that happens! For me, it seems to happen most when I'm lying in a bubble bath...random thoughts just wander into my head...and I have to sit there and debate over if I want to drag my dripping self out of the tub to go to my office (home office) for paper and pen to write it down or just hope I remember it when I get through...I like your line, by the way...I can visualize it well! Sounds like something you could expand upon...
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      By the way...where'd you get that dress? I love it! I liked the top, too...*Lol*
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i don't think it's bad....i think it's cool but i can see how you would think of it one way and then later see it a different way....but i think it's a very vivid picture.
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]


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