Description: This is a line that sounded good to me when I woke up in the middle of the night and wrote it. This is unfinished. That's why I put it in Random Thoughts. I was trying to prove that I can write dreadful stuff.
Worst Line of Poetry Ever -------------------------------------------
The seagulls lend their beauty to the visual and odorous stench of the landfill.
I can see what you mean here... I do this too.. hold on, lemme get my notebook and I'll find one of my terrible lines, here we are...
"I'm stuck in a rut, my rhyme scheme sounds like something barked by a mutt..."
*rolls eyes* Yeah, I do it too LOL! And I can just see.. you could sleep easy maybe, thinking of this GREAT line, filled with potential, perhaps, perhaps, this is the Daffodils! and then you wake up the next morning and look at the paper, and there's a groan...
"Was I really going to write a poem about a rubbish dump?!" But thinking of seagulls and landfills is what makes you a writer... I thought that line was hilarious tho.. keep it up, Ames!
I'm sure Rudyard Kipling was right when he said that "words are of course the most powerful drug known to mankind". I also wake up with a wild idea flying around that I just have to put on paper, or even worse, sitting in the bath and before I can get to a piece of paper I have to face ten stories, relate a few of my own and dry my hands. By that time the magic is diluted and the bathwater cold. Aaagh, frustration. YOu got this one down alright though, develop into three lines and it may not be the best ever, but I reckon it will be noteworthy.
ummmm.....i remember spending some time at the landfill....i was the only one there at the time emptying a largish trailer and the whole place was swarmed with what could have been million of seagulls...my one thought was 'lord, if these mindless avians had any brains at all they could get together and attack me and i would be dead in less than 30 seconds....' beauty? i think not....(i've got a whole notebook full of stuff i wake up with) Have a great day!!
it has something. I can envision it at the beginning of some descriptive part of a novel or a poem. it paints a good picture. do something with it. I know that feeling of waking up with a line in my head. it keeps swirling in my mind until I write it down. mostly they end up in some poem. sometimes the writing down is the end. anyway I liked it. do something with it and it isn't the worst line of poetry ever.
God, I hate when that happens! For me, it seems to happen most when I'm lying in a bubble bath...random thoughts just wander into my head...and I have to sit there and debate over if I want to drag my dripping self out of the tub to go to my office (home office) for paper and pen to write it down or just hope I remember it when I get through...I like your line, by the way...I can visualize it well! Sounds like something you could expand upon...