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    dots Submission Name: My Wordsdots

    Author: DrewDilla
    ASL Info:    25/M/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 131/196/51
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Satire
    Total Views: 1463
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 683


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    dotsMy Wordsdots

    Every different day I face. Which will be my place? That I will land and in my hand I hold the knowledge on how not to get old, and forget what you were told. How not to be bold. Now grab a hold n Iíll unload. How to build a new mold. That forms my rearranged brain. Far from being plain. And very hard to obtain. First you must re frame. Your world game, and while you there why not a new name. So you can fully obtain a glide of a Crain, or water falling off a lionís mane why doesn't it leave a stain? Itís all the simple things in our lives. Like why do we love our wives? Even though they strive. To always drive. Your new ride, and she lies and fake cries.

    Submitted on 2006-12-11 01:16:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your searching for a way to express your love and also you have given place to an adventourous trip from beyond. Keep up the pen man ship.
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by timelesspilot20 | [ Reply to This ]
      love the lion idea, the stain.... so many good things to say about it but none of them explain what you captured.... love the wives idea too.... really well done- you have a special tone. x x x
    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by Charlie Poppins | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved this little shindig you did here. lol. it had very good wording and points.......it's definently different that anything else on here and i like that.

    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by shayla8911 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow a rap..thats cool...I like it. Not much I can say on it though, never really critiqued a rap. But it seems like it has alot of good points and makes sense. I like it.

    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]
      it think it was cool its a true fact in life
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by washwnd | [ Reply to This ]

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