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Through A Cloud

Author: Liv2LoveThePain
ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527 /1515 /256
Words: 181
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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Through A Cloud

There's nobody to play with me.
Goodbye, Sunshine. It's time
to walk the path of nothingness
that you once said is mine.
The soul in the mirror
of a face long gone
knows the words, loves the song,
but fails to sing along.
Lover of "The Patients"
("victims," as they're known)
finally gives up on them,
but never calls them home.
Lyrics of the lost
repeat slowly at night,
perverse delight
on self-inflicted fights.
You're crying through a cloud,
waiting for the day
a hero comes
(though undone)
to take it all away.
Silence reigns
this kingdom of The End,
and no one gets the postcards
you so often send.
I said good-bye to love
to suffocate romance.
It's all the same,
so in the flames,
I'll close my eyes and dance.
Put roses on my pillow
without a second glance.
Maybe if it's all a dream,
we'll get that one last chance.
With your lighter to the stars,
the moon falls in the sea.
I'd walk that path
to hear you laugh,
'cause part of you is me.

Submitted on 2006-12-11 15:02:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was soooo amazing but it was sad. Seriously, why are you so talented? not fair. Oh well, cant have it all. anyway, i think this is one of my favorites. I'm sad but it was worth it.
| Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]
  an incredible piece! i think it could be a song.. ^_^
my favorite part was about the moon falling into the sea... cuz i love the moon.. and the sea :P
it was neat the way the lines were started to give the poem thing more meaning to the singled out word or phrase
did that make sense? O.o? ^_^
your works are so amazing
i'm excited to read more!
| Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by LoneWolf | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this so much! It had so much feeling in it!!! Great write!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  What are you trying to say?

It flows really well, and the lines are catchy, very catchy, but i don't really get it. Let me know.
| Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]

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