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    dots Submission Name: "The House On Brannon Hill"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dots"The House On Brannon Hill"dots
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    There's a gravel curving driveway
    to the house on
    Brannon Hill

    It's the home of old Jed
    Corway,
    and his daughter lives there
    still

    Old Jed never had
    much money
    and what he had
    he spent

    to see that needy families
    could eat
    and pay the
    rent

    Jed passed away last
    Friday
    but his body was
    never
    found

    the Angels cared too
    much
    for him
    to have him interred
    in the
    ground

    they left instead
    a Golden Wreath
    inscribed with Silver
    Frill

    that said he was sent
    to a better place
    than the
    house
    on
    Brannon Hill.

    Ron Cole
    December 2006




    Submitted on 2006-12-11 22:21:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Thats such a sweet poem Ron, i really love it. It reads beautifully and has such a sweet story. nice work xxx

    ~lou~
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      well, i like it!! it's simple, yet touching.
    it does tell a nice wee story, and i like old Jed, God bless him!!
    michelle
    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I'll disagree with Itzu--there is no higher purpose than writing to say something. The only ones that disagree are the saps who discard the idea of a message in favor of penning "what sells."

    Keep it up.

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      oh nice. Nice story poem.

    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know what to put. It's good but it seems to lack. The only purpose I can read is that if you do right by God you'll have a reward in Heaven and on Earth. And I would call that didactic but I don't think your purpose is more important than the poem itself. So, 4/5 in my books.
    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by Itzu | [ Reply to This ]
      Very wistful and well done ... the short lines work very well and the recurring rhymes are quite potent indeed ... a simple and straight forward poem in its concept (simple is ALWAYS best when it comes to poetry) ... very fine ... I liked it muchly ... bravo! ... bravo! ... bravo! ... Michael
    | Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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