"The House On Brannon Hill" by Ron Cole

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Author:	Ron Cole
Elite Ratio:	3.87 - 1932/1321/203
Words:	119

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	252
Average Vote:	4.5000
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"The House On Brannon Hill" dots

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There's a gravel curving driveway
to the house on
Brannon Hill

It's the home of old Jed
Corway,
and his daughter lives there
still

Old Jed never had
much money
and what he had
he spent

to see that needy families
could eat
and pay the
rent

Jed passed away last
Friday
but his body was
never
found

the Angels cared too
much
for him
to have him interred
in the
ground

they left instead
a Golden Wreath
inscribed with Silver
Frill

that said he was sent
to a better place
than the
house
on
Brannon Hill.

Ron Cole
December 2006

Submitted on 2006-12-11 22:21:30 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Thats such a sweet poem Ron, i really love it. It reads beautifully and has such a sweet story. nice work xxx

~lou~
| Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
  well, i like it!! it's simple, yet touching.
it does tell a nice wee story, and i like old Jed, God bless him!!
michelle
| Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  I think I'll disagree with Itzu--there is no higher purpose than writing to say something. The only ones that disagree are the saps who discard the idea of a message in favor of penning "what sells."

Keep it up.

--crimson echo
| Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
  oh nice. Nice story poem.

| Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't know what to put. It's good but it seems to lack. The only purpose I can read is that if you do right by God you'll have a reward in Heaven and on Earth. And I would call that didactic but I don't think your purpose is more important than the poem itself. So, 4/5 in my books.
| Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by Itzu | [ Reply to This ]
  Very wistful and well done ... the short lines work very well and the recurring rhymes are quite potent indeed ... a simple and straight forward poem in its concept (simple is ALWAYS best when it comes to poetry) ... very fine ... I liked it muchly ... bravo! ... bravo! ... bravo! ... Michael
| Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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