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    dots Submission Name: So I Need Youdots
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    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 832
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 770



    Description:
       This poem is a work in progress, if you have any ideas or comments PLEASE let me know.


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    dotsSo I Need Youdots
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    There is so much I want to say,
    But where to start?
    Your my every breath,
    and beat of my heart.

    When you hold me,
    in your arms so tight,
    in the darkness,
    late at night,
    I feel how much you love me,
    in the warmth of your tough.
    I never knew it was possible,
    to love someone so much.

    I can see in your eyes,
    there is no one but me.
    I know for sure now,
    we are meant to be.

    Without you, cannot love,
    nor can I live.
    heres my heart,
    and to you in trust I give

    For to my heart,
    I will be true.
    Never forget,
    How much I love you.







    Submitted on 2006-12-11 23:42:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh, I liked this and can definitly relate...gave me chills cuz I know how it feels. hmm that rhymed and wasn't supposed to lol. Well...hey look...I think there might be a mispelled word here

    in the warmth of your tough

    is that supposed to be touch or maybe it's an unfinished thought? I have alot of those unfinished thoughts in my poems...but anyway....I thought I'd point it out to you.

    Kris
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmmm
    pretty cliché.
    i got kinda bored because i wasn't surprised in any way and i don't know.
    the only reason i like it is because it's how you feel and a lot of people do experience those feelings and what not.

    There is so much I want to say,
    But where to start?
    Your my every breath,
    and beat of my heart.

    i did like that stanza the most.
    don't you hate it when you can say so much yet you don't know how to start?
    gosh, yeah..

    keep writing.

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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