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    dots Submission Name: Two-Faced Solacedots
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    Author: NishantM
    ASL Info:    13/M/UAE
    Elite Ratio:    0.7 - 0/1/8
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 64
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1374



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    dotsTwo-Faced Solacedots
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    Caressing the warmth of the candlelight,
    your voice soars through the wind,
    Like the doves set free in the breeze,
    An insight to the world's disasters,
    The oucome of unrequited love,
    The tale of sorries and purposes.

    How I wish I knew what you want me to say.

    For now, I just listen.
    To the silent song of your heartbeat,
    So distant but it echoes in the clocks.
    Reminders of fading minutes.

    The world waits, or is it just me?

    I know what I'm doing, I hope.
    And so do you.

    So do you.

    I meant every word I said.
    But maybe you don't either.
    Or so it seems,
    I have not forgotten everything.
    I just didn't take the time to remember,
    When I made dangerous commitments,
    It looks like I've stuck to them.
    Unmeant, perhaps?
    I don't think so.

    I don't think so.

    How the times have changed.
    How our lives have changed.

    All it seems to be is lost,
    But all it is has not.

    Just know this:
    you look mighty fine tonight,
    your voice echoing through the wind.
    The distance is getting to me.

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    © Nishant Mehrotra, 2006




    Submitted on 2006-12-12 06:56:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Overally, the construction of the poem and the imagery grabbed my attention more so than the meaning. This poem has such a unique effect...somehow, you managed to capture the feeling of waiting for something, like holding your breath...just a pause. We don't know what's going to happen next, but for now we just take a break. I like how the repetition adds to the effect as well, almost like slowing down time. The ebb and flow of the rhythm is really unique as well, and fits the poem; it reminds me of ocean waves, like how tides flow in and out on the shore, changing the sand. Just a really cool poem. Good job.
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by Dandelion13 | [ Reply to This ]



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